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19.02.2009
00:58
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Mychu [ Pretorianin ]

Angielski - pomoc :)

Prosba o sprawdzenie i poprawienie. Wiem ze jestem tepy :)
Temat - "czy to prawda ze pieniadze nie daja szczescia?" opinion essay

(w miejsce ___ brakuje mi slow i jakby ktos z kontekstu wylapal o co mi chodzi i zechcial mi pomoc - bylbym wdzieczny!)

Today’s world is based on money. Most of us work hard for our salaries so we can afford to buy what we need and want. The more money we have the more items we can buy. There is no doubt that money makes life much easier, but the question is – can we truly buy everything? Does being rich guarantee happiness?
First of all, rich people strongly believe that material things give them satisfaction. They claim that for money they can have everything they need to live comfortably and happily. Expensive cars, big houses and exotic trips - these are the things that most of us want to have. Moreover, many people are convinced that thanks to money, they can
have many friends and that they will be respected.
On the other hand, there is some much worthiest things than ______, like good health, fast friends or loving family. The honest feelings cannot be bought.

To sum up, I think money is one of most important things that we need to live comfortably. But I believe that, there are more prominent ____ than _____. We must remember - we can buy health care, not good health, also _____, not friendship.

19.02.2009
01:39
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Tomcio_666 [ Płatki Addicted ]


In present times world is based on money.(co do tego zdania nie jestem pewien) Most of us works hard for our salaries so we can afford to buy what we need and want. The more money we have the more things we can buy. There is no doubt that money makes life much easier, but the question is – can we really buy everything? Does being rich guarantees us happiness?
First of all, rich people strongly believe that material things will give them satisfaction. They claim that for money they can have everything they need to live comfortably and happily. Expensive cars, big houses and exotic trips - these are the things that most of us want to have. Moreover, many people are convinced that money will help them make friends and gain respect.
On the other hand, there are much valuable things than money we can earn, like good health, friends or loving family. The honest feelings cannot be bought.

To sum up, I think money is one of most important things that we need to live comfortably, but I believe that there are more prominent values than everlasting profits. We have to remember - we can buy health care, not good health, also comfort, not friendship.

19.02.2009
01:46
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Hakim [ Generaďż˝ ]

On the other hand, there IS some much worthiest things than ______, like good health, fast friends or loving family. The honest feelings cannot be bought.

Zamiast is - are.

Moja propozycja:
On the other hand, there are a lot of thinks which can't be bought. Good health, true friendship or loving family is priceless. Truly honest feelings are not buyable (able to buy for money).

I think money is one of the most important things...

Przed ostatnie zdanie nie czaję o co ma chodzić - sprecyzuj.

Ostatnie zapisałbym tak:
We must remember (albo Keep in mind, by ciągle tego "we" nie powtarzać)- we can buy health care, but neither good health nor frinedship.

Taki mój punkt widzenia;)

19.02.2009
01:54
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Tomcio_666 [ Płatki Addicted ]

Hakim -> W ostatnim zdaniu chodzi o to, ze za kase możesz zapewnić opiekę medyczną, ale nie kupisz zdrowia, tak samo jak możesz kupić _____, ale nie kupisz przyjaźni. (wstawić w tą lukę przyjaciół było trochę głupio, więc wrzuciłem comfort), chociaż Twoja propozycja też jest ok.


I think money is one of most important things...
- nie wiem gdzie ja miałem oczy jak to czytałem :)

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