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Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie - Angielski

04.11.2008
20:13
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polak111 [ LOXXII ]

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie - Angielski

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie charakterystyki:

Will Freeman is the main hero of the film which name is “About a boy”. He is single and lonely man who looks for a girlfriend. He’s wealthy person because his father has written the song, which is popular now. Will has got a lot of money so he mustn’t work.
Physically, main hero looks rather young. He is about 35 years old. He is tall, handsome and nice-looking man who has got dark, medium-long, uncombed hairs. He has got blue eyes. He prefers wearing fashionable, modern and according to situation.
As for his personality, Will’s character is very interesting, diverse and controversial. Man is very dishonest person because he lied women that he has got a baby. He said that he has got baby because he wanted to meet with single mothers. He wanted to choose woman from their with which he might be in relationship. Also, he is so brave that he continuously lies. His life style is easy-going because he is carefree. Will is egoistic because he thinks only about himself. At the beginning of the film he is such but at the end of one he is responsible, caring and honest.
Will don’t have got interesting occupations. All the days he spends his time on watching TV. He sometimes listens to the music. He often goes to shopping centres and hairdresser. He devotes all the time for himself.
I think that Will Freeman is positive person of film. He understood some things and he changed himself. His person arouses a lot of emotions of spectator.


Za pomoc serdecznie dziękuję!

04.11.2008
20:48
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polak111 [ LOXXII ]

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04.11.2008
21:57
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iNfiNity! [ NSX ]

Nie ma żadnego zdania poprawnie.

1. W tekście brakuje przedimków a/an/the - DO UZUPEŁNIENIA!!!
2. Szyk zdania - DO POPRAWKI!!!

Nie mam siły poprawiać w/w punktów, może ktoś się skusi :)
Nie wiem w której klasie jesteś, ale z grubszych kwiatków:

Will has got a lot of money so he mustn’t work. - mustn't znaczy "nie musi"

He prefers wearing fashionable, modern and according to situation. - co lubi nosić??? obrączki? ubrania? kolczyki?

he lied women - he lied to women

He wanted to choose woman from their with which he might be in relationship. - ?????????

Will don’t have got - doesn't have albo hasn't got

He devotes all the time for himself. - to himself

His person arouses a lot of emotions of spectator. - in spectators

04.11.2008
22:38
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polak111 [ LOXXII ]

Klasa I LO...

Czemu zawsze tak się dzieje, że jak mam napisać dluższy tekst to robię tyle błędów? :(

06.11.2008
18:22
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polak111 [ LOXXII ]

Muszę się pochwalić, że dostałem za to 4

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