Bardzo prosze o poprawe listu z Angola...

17.12.2007

22:28

[1]

Axl2000 [ Hohner ]

Bardzo prosze o poprawe listu z Angola...

Mrs Sara Fisher
"Stockholm English School"
17 Riddar Holmen St.
Stockholm
SWEDEN

Dear Mrs Fisher,

I would like to receive information about your Stockholm English School. I’ve studied carefully your website on requirements for students hoping to learn there, but I have some
other questions connected to this topic.
First of all, I would like to ask about price, and payment methods for a semester in your school.
Is there any possibility to pay by credit card or paypal (or other internet payment website)?
If it is so, I would like to know If I can pay monthly or I am obligated to pay all price once.
Another question is how does your learning system look? Do I have to be present on every lesson?
I am asking about it because my work time is not systematic, and sometimes I have to be available for employer for 12 hours a day.
TU JESZCZE JAKIEŚ PYTANIE

ZAKOŃCZENIE :)

Jesli jest tu ktoś znający angola w stopniu wyzszym niz ja to bede wdzieczny za pomoc i poprawki bo sam juz widze bledy ale nie mam sily o tej porze nic juz z siebie wykrzesac...

17.12.2007

22:58

[2]

Boginka [ Sybarytka ]

Masz tutaj wytłuszczone miejsca, w których są błędy (przy niektórych nawiasy z komentarzami). W dwóch miejscach dodałam słowo, ale to sygnał, że właściwie powinieneś uprościć/zmienić tak, żebyś nie musiał używać słów, których nie znasz.

I would like to receive [dodaj] information about your Stockholm English School. I’ve studied carefully your website on requirements for students hoping to learn there [szyk wyrazów mocno zwichorwany - poprzestawiaj lub napisz od nowa], but I have some other questions connected to this topic.
First of all, I would like to ask about [brakuje czegoś] price, and payment methods [przestaw w inne miejsce] for a semester in your school.
Is there any possibility to pay by credit card or paypal (or [brakuje] other internet payment website)?
If so, I would like to know if I can pay monthly fess or I am obligated to pay all [zmień] price [brakuje] once.
Another question is how does your learning system look [zmień]? Do I have to be present on every lesson? I am asking about it because my work [popraw] time is not set, and sometimes I have to be available for employer for [uprość-tak nie ma to sensu] 12 hours a day.

PS. Wiem, że prosiłeś o poprawienie tego za Ciebie. Uznałam, że lepsza taka odpowiedź niż żadna - poprawiać bym nie poprawiła, bo nauczyciel i tak się połapie.

17.12.2007

22:58

[3]

Szczeblo [ Konsul ]

sprawdzone bardzo pobieznie:

I would like to receive further information about your Stockholm English School. I have read carefully your recrutation requirements, but still I have some queries related to this matter.
First of all, I would like to ask about price and payment methods for a semester in your school.
Is there any possibility to pay by credit card or paypal (or other internet payment method)?
If it is posiible, would you mind telling me If monthly payment is avalaible, or am I obligated to pay all price at once.
Secondly, I would be grateful if you could tell me how does your teaching system work? Is it necessary to be present at every lesson? It is essential to me, because my worktime is not systematic and sometimes I have to be available for work nearly all day.

to co mi nie brzmialo łopatologicznie przeksztalcilem, ale uprzedzam ze nie jestem do konca pewien paru pierdol. Przed tym kolejnym pytaniem wez 'Finally' albo cos w tym stylu.

pozdro

edit: jeśli coś między moją pracą a Boginki jest sprzeczne, to stawiaj na Boginkę ;P

17.12.2007

23:11

[4]

Boginka [ Sybarytka ]

Szczeblo – dzięki za komplement. :) Sporo poprawiłeś, ale wydaje mi się że część została. Więc bez ingerowania w styl i poziom poprawiłabym przynajmniej:

I would like to receive further information about your Stockholm English School. I have read carefully your recrutation requirements, but still I have some queries related to this matter.
First of all, I would like to ask about [_] price and payment methods for a semester in your school.
Is there any possibility to pay by credit card or paypal (or [_] other internet payment method)?
If it is posiible, would you mind telling me If monthly payment is avalaible, or am I obligated to pay all price at once.
Secondly, I would be grateful if you could tell me how does your teaching system work? Is it necessary to be present at every lesson? It is essential to me, because my worktime (?) is not systematic and sometimes I have to be available for work nearly all day.

17.12.2007

23:24

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Misio-Jedi [ Legend ]

Typowo polski blad - brak przedimkow (my ich nie mamy, latwo o nich zapomniec)

I would like to receive some further information about your Stockholm English School. I have examined carefully all your recrutation requirements, but still have some queries related to this matter.
First of all, I would like to ask about the price and payment methods for a semester in your school.
Is there any possibility to pay by a credit card or paypal (or other internet payment method)?
If it is possible, would you mind telling me If monthly payment is avalaible, or am I obligated to pay all theprice at once.
Secondly, I would be grateful if you could tell me how does your teaching system work? Is it necessary to be present at every lesson? It is essential to me, as my worktime is not systematic and sometimes I am asked to be available for work nearly all day.