Proste opowiadanie na angielski.

18.11.2007

21:14

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Shreddy [ Pretorianin ]

Proste opowiadanie na angielski.

Czy mógłby ktoś sprawdzić i poprawić błędy? Z góry dziękuję
Opowiadanie nie jest jeszcze skończone, ale z końcówką sobie już poradzę. :)
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In 90s Zyta was a famous film star. She played in great films and many critics agreed that she should get the Oscar. Unfortunately, she has never won this prize. Probably it was the main reason of her currently awful position in show business. She was treated as a fallen film star. No interesting leads have been offered to her for a long time. Even her boss was thinking about firing her. And finally he did it.
When Zyta heard about it she was left speechless. She loved watching films with herself doing dangerous things and having lots of adventures. She broke down. Could it be the end of her career?
Having no job she was spending all boring days eating delicious sweets, drinking coffee with ice and watching senseless Brazilian telenovelas. One day she turned on the Discovery Channel and saw a commercial encouraging to take part in adventure race in Morocco. During the race competitors had to get from point A to point B in 12 days using bikes, horses, canoes and camels. Then she understood that if she starts in this race she could comply her dreams.

Pan P. [ Konsul ]

In the 90s Zyta was a famous film star. She played in great films and many critics agreed that she should get an Oscar. Unfortunately, she has never won this prize. Probably it was the main reason of her current (bez -ly chyba, głowy nie dam) awful position in show business. She was treated like a fallen film star. No interesting propositions (leads? nie-e) have been offered to her for a long time. Even her boss was thinking about firing her. And finally he did it.
When Zyta heard about it she was left speechless. She loved watching films with herself doing dangerous things and having lots of adventures. She broke down. Could it be the end of her career?
Having no job she was spending all boring days eating delicious sweets, drinking coffee with ice and watching senseless Brazilian soap operas. One day she turned on the Discovery Channel and saw a commercial encouraging to take part in an adventure race in Morocco. During the race competitors had to get from point A to point B in 12 days using bikes, horses, canoes and camels. Then she understood that if she participated in this race she could fulfill her dreams.

Tak na szybko, bo nie mam czasu już. Wstaw przecinki, bo chyba zapomniałeś o istnieniu interpunkcji. Generalnie w porządku jest.