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Angielski -> prośba o pomoc -> sprawdzenie

12.09.2007
21:24
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Vegetan [ Zbieramy pieniążki ]

Angielski -> prośba o pomoc -> sprawdzenie

Witam.

Miałbym prośbę, aby mi Golowi speakerzy sprawdzili opinion essay nt. "Coraz więcej młodych Polaków opuszcza swój kraj, aby podjąc studia w Wielkiej Brytani" napisz o złych i dobrych stronach tego zjawiska

When borders in European Union were opened, a lot of Polish decided to use that opportunity and went to United Kingdom for studying. The knowledge of well rated universities, like Oxford or Cambridge is prevalent. But, is young people emmigration for studies beneficial or dreadful for Poland?
First of all, Poland does have smart students and they are often succesful. Thanks to their work, Poland is praised all over the World for having very good students and labourer workers. Foreign companies invest their money in them and in the Poland, to create a great ground for next generations. What is more, somebody who finished British university does achieve more experiance than Polish students and can be more effective in companies from which depend our country development.
However, lots of students stay in United Kingdom and there is no material benefit for Poland. Furthermore, almost every youngster thing now, that English universities are greater than Polish, what is absolutely under-rating our schools. There are also high-level universities in Poland, what is shown with European Union donation for the best high schools. Despite many succeses, Polish universities are thought to be worse than foreign. This really ruins their opinion.
To take everything into account, we have in our country a lot of students who are superb and they should achieve little more experiance than is provided by Poland, but they also should come back. And there is not like in Polish Universities are only worse students. There are also smart people. Finally, I think that studying emmigration is not destructive for country.




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12.09.2007
23:47
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DEXiu [ Generał ]

When borders in European Union were opened, a lot of Poles decided to take the opportunity and went to United Kingdom for studying. The knowledge of well rated universities, like Oxford or Cambridge is prevalent. But, is young people emmigration for studying beneficial or dreadful for Poland?
First of all, Poland does have smart students and they are often succesful. Thanks to their work, Poland is praised all over the World for having very good students and labourer workers. Foreign companies invest their money in them and in [usunięto "the"] Poland, to create a great ground for next generations. What is more, somebody who finished British university does have more experiance than Polish students and can be more effective in companies which our country development depend on (przesunięte i zmienione - "depend" zawsze łączy się z "on").
However, lots of students stay in United Kingdom and there is no material benefit for Poland. Furthermore, almost every youngster thinks now, that English universities are greater than Polish, what is absolutely under-rating our schools. There are also high-level universities in Poland, what is shown with European Union donation for the best high schools. Despite many succeses, Polish universities are thought to be worse than foreign. This really ruins their opinion.
To take everything into account, we have in our country a lot of students who are superb and they should achieve little more experiance than is provided by Poland, but they also should come back. And there is not like (może "it is not true that"?) in Polish Universities are only worse students. There are also smart people. Finally, I think that studying emmigration is not destructive for country.

Pogrubiłem miejsca, gdzie naniosłem poprawki. Kursywą zaznaczyłem fragmenty, które należałoby przeformułować bo wg mnie jest to niepoprawna kalka z polskiego (takie "Kali jeść, Kali pić"). Natomias podkreślone są fragmenty, których zamierzonego znaczenia nie byłem w stanie się domyślić :/

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